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a good song never dies a good song never dies blog blog about navigation following link 1 link 2 link 3 link 4 a good song never dies home archive blog about navigation following theme link 1 link 2 link 3 link 4 groggygrady tevanbuckley tevanbuckley it s okay no it s not i know it s not heated rivalry 1 03 v 1 0 5 bonus 5581 heated rivalry scunthotter penandinkprincess penandinkprincess okay but with the way yuna tends to handle things as a momager i m just imagining her at dinner one night after ilya s been in ottawa for a while in his first year just getting up from the table to get another glass of wine or something and then lightly touching ilya s shoulder because she just remembered something she meant to say earlier and just oh by the way i meant to tell you i think you should go ahead and put me or david down as one of your emergency contacts everyone already knows you and shane are friendly now and with the rest of your family so far away i don t think anyone would find it too strange to want to have someone local in case anything happens and then she just goes on about her business while ilya is trying very hard to be chill and normal about the way yuna is acting like yes of course they would want to know if he was hurt so they could be there and that yuna has thought about this and wants him to do it because she wants to be there if he needs her and david like it s nothing and it s not him asking it s her offering not even offering just mom ing at him the same way she does shane and ilya is having this full internal feelings journey and meanwhile yuna has already moved on to the brand deal she s been looking into for him with that new menswear line you remember she mentioned it last time well they said they 715 heated rivalry cloudabserk cloudabserk cloudabserk lyric from constant headache by joyce manor 3873 project hail mary marycontraire wafflewarrior111 wafflewarrior111 so i found this and now it keeps coming to mind you hear about life changing writing advice all the time and usually its really not but honestly this is it man i m going to try it missroserose i love the lawyer metaphor because whenever i see john knew that in prose writing i immediately think how how does he know it interrogate your witnesses cross examine them make them explain their reasoning it pays dividends heck in a handbasket all of this but also feels felt my editor has forbidden me from using those and it s forced me to stretch my skills ineedthesons this is your show not tell advice explained tarysande editor here first let me preface this with something very important you can treat all of this advice as second draft advice it is so much easier to rewrite this kind of stuff once you have words on the page telling yourself the first draft is totally appropriate and acceptable what we re talking about here are filter words and to some degree verbs of being yes thought words are included but so are heard saw looked tasted smelled etc most words having to do with the senses this isn t black and white advice sometimes you ll use these words and that s okay they re not wrong they re just weaker and they re weaker because they create distance between the reader and the experience of the character if you want your reader to feel like they re experiencing the story right alongside the character you want to cut down on filter words this is particularly important with first person and close third povs the reader always knows whose eyes they re seeing through and thoughts they re privy to so you don t need to tell them i saw x or i heard x or i thought y you can just jump into the action observation as it s happening this is also where you want to pay attention to verbs of being it was rainy versus the rain pounded against the roof or the rain howled like an injured animal or the rain tapped against the window like an anxious lover all of these are inviting the reader deeper into the experience of the story by using stronger verbs and similes and at the same time they stir feelings instead of telling feelings and feelings keep your reader engaged engaged readers keep turning pages engaged readers become fans the haiku bot this is also where you want to pay attention to verbs of being beep boop i look for accidental haiku posts sometimes i mess up defilerwyrm the most valuable advice that author ex gave me through the years that we wrote together was this the problem with all these filter words is that they create distance in the pov that means that when you read a line like john saw that the curtains were open it immediately takes you out of the character s perspective and instead tells you what they experience as a secondhand observation you don t have to get fancy or purple with how you rephrase things like this not everything needs a ton of breathing room you wanna know what s perfectly impactful while keeping a tight pov the curtains were open simple as that porcupine girl what i always love about this every time it crosses my dash is that while it s good advice it s not actually framed as advice it s framed as a time limited challenge that s very different it s not saying never use these words again it s saying give this a try a really hardcore try just for a little while it says six months but obviously you can adjust that and see what happens which is so much more useful because it s framing it as a learning experience if you do this for six months or two months or one full story or whatever at the end of that time you ll have a better understanding of when these words are and aren t necessary and when and how to use them to get the specific effect you want because like defilerwyrm says they create distance and maybe sometimes you want that so much writing advice falls flat because you can always think of an exception that allows you to ignore the rule but a writing challenge gives you a chance to explore new territory and see how it works 109920 words writing scunthotter mymultifandomhell mymultifandomhell heated rivalry text poor scott 414 heated rivalry hardlyhinged penandinkprincess coffeebox62 asked genuinely surprised to see you ve not made either hr boys into a selkie yet can you imagine baby shane just turning into a seal rebelliously because he doesn t want to leave practice yet or the rock scene at the cottage except ilya is a seal slapping water at shane penandinkprincess answered the idea of bb seal shane so angy and making more noise as a pup than he ever does as a human child is so special and important to me yuna took her eyes off of him for like 0 5 seconds while talking to his coach and he dug his pelt out of his bag he and yuna were going to go soak after practice put it on and then slipped right back on the ice can t catch him now too fast can t pick him up either too blob and wiggly him is never leaving ice d shane trying to get his own pelt on and ilya already in his seal form keeps splashing him and making it harder to focus on shifting stop enough more splashing also the idea of them both in seal form playing in the lake is so much to me oh my god hardlyhinged op s tags 267 heated rivalry nightquills thememedaddy thememedaddy 81949 real lol letitdevour rozanovshane rozanovshane toddler shane refusing to talk after his hockey team lose a game yuna david are trying to be encouraging like bud you played so good and shane is ignoring them while climbing into his car seat where he s going to angrily drink his juice box and then chew on the straw rabbittush he s had a rough day 15585 heated rivalry mywingsareonwheels madonnamadeofasphalt madonnamadeofasphalt the romance of all time 1885 sherlock holmes flora flauna kodainhisnaturalhabitat kodainhisnaturalhabitat this series of photos is so silly to me 113 weeeeee previous next next about me quote goes here quote source here name age pronouns add information about yourself here some basic knowledge of html is recommended elsewhere link name links header subheading 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