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s the shadow the dreaded evil army that seeks to bring chaos and destruction to the land but in order to achieve his revenge aiden has to face challenges beyond just acquiring the pieces of the key that will free the shadow lord from hell his ex fiancée joins the forces of the very church he is fighting against and a heated rivalry soon forms between aiden and the ruthless commander of the shadow himself both for the power they both desire and for love descent into darkness is a 129 500 word work of fantasy it is the first in a series of two books the second of which is currently in progress thank you for your consideration sincerely author posted by rick daley at 8 09 am 5 comments labels fantasy feb 10 2010 a successful query kiersten white posted a successful query on her blog you should check it out the book she queried didn t sell but it landed her an agent and she does have a publishing contract now for another book it s nice of her to share her steps on the path to publishing success posted by rick daley at 9 38 am no comments labels successful query feb 8 2010 query absorption dear agent x as a young medic brett johnson saw the atrocities perpetrated by the hive mind alexander a decade later the space force has sent him to the planet oceania where the nanotechnology alexander was based upon was developed oceania is home to the oldest and largest hive mind in existence and the planet has derived many economic and medical benefits from it brett s job is to convince the oceanians that even those who voluntarily became part of the hive mind don t fully understand the peril to their humanity and that they must allow the nanotechnology and everything based on it to be destroyed rather than forcing the federalist worlds to fight a bloody war against them he is also supposed to learn as much as possible about oceanian technology and government to help win a war if one is inevitable at first brett believes deeply in his mission then he rashly seduces a beautiful woman knowing this may interfere with his mission yet believing it the only way to distract her from giving her soul to the hive mind with her help he learns more about oceania than his superiors could have hoped but begins to question what he s been told is the hive mind truly a malignant entity seeking to trick humans into building the tools it needs to devour them or a collaborative tool enabling people to perform superhuman feats of intellect he can only know for certain by becoming part of the supermind if he was right all along and no individual can ever leave he will never know what he s lost and those who hear his report may not understand until it s too late if the federalist worlds have completely misunderstood what s at stake it may well be too late to convince them and the home world of the woman he loves may be wracked by a devastating and unnecessary war absorption is an eighty thousand word science fiction novel please write me for a full or partial manuscript i received my mls from the state university of new york at albany grateful regards david weisman posted by rick daley at 2 45 pm 7 comments labels science fiction feb 7 2010 sample pages am i worth it click here to read the first sample page submission click here to read the second sample page submission click here to read the most recent query just a side note its been a few months since i posted a revision of this story because i got really frustrated trying to revise what already existed finally i decided to tone down the mc and give him a little more mystery in the first chapter i still don t know if its the right place to start but at least i m no longer stuck i attempted suicide exactly once a day twice would be excessive it would lose its value i was starting to think it already had and i was starting to like it here enjoying a blistering cold november in chicago after spending my entire seventeen years in california was not part of my plan i should hate my life right now but i didn t and it was so wrong for me to be happy i made my usual climb up the rocky wall my hands numb from the cold wind but the feeling was exhilarating i couldn t deny that san jose had such mild weather compared to this the way the bitter cold steals your breathe stings the tips of your fingers and toe it was fascinating when i reached the top of the mound of giant rocks i looked out at lake michigan spread before my eyes it wasn t california but damn it was beautiful even with the bite of a cold winter i closed my eyes and i was there again with her the girl i was sentenced to spend a lifetime with every weekend it s the same fucking thing get drunk and party maybe hook up with some random girl don t you ever get tired of it i glanced over at my friend he wasn t even listening he was watching a group of girls dancing hey dan someone s checking you out trenton sang he handed me another shot glass of whiskey and pointed at a short girl with dark hair across the room what s her name hailey or something i asked trenton laughed and shook his head how many shots have you had you never forget anyone s name six shots hannah i remembered he moved beside me leaning against the counter what do you say i don t think you d have any trouble getting in that girls pants she totally wants you i laughed and my head spun even more you re such an ass trent if i were a chick there would be a warning label tattooed across your forehead i d make sure of that we can t all be as god damn charming as you he said i rested my head in my hands massaging my temples wishing i hadn t drank so much exactly thirty seconds later i got a whiff of perfume hannah fuentes i said without lifting my head dan anderson she answered giggling one strike against her already giggling girls were a little bit of a turn off for me or maybe they just seemed fake rehearsed so you remember me she asked i lifted my head meeting her brown eyes yes we had biology freshman year you sat in the third table on the window side of the room next to byron silverman her face lit up with a look of excitement possibilities i cursed myself silently now she was going to think i spent the past two years dreaming about watching her bend over to pull a pencil out of her bag or something see what i mean god damn charming trent muttered as he walked away you want to dance she asked damn why didn t i go home early like a good little senator s son okay she grabbed my hand and pulled me to the middle of the giant living room with the rest of the drunken upper classman the music was fast and loud the beat the lights my spinning head none of it allowed me to think clearly and i knew this wouldn t end well then she was kissing me her tongue dancing around in my mouth it wasn t a bad kiss but it wasn t love and it should be the vibration coming from my pocket shook me out of this morning ritual my pounding heart slowed just a little before i flipped open the phone hi steve dan where are you i got up at five thirty and you were gone did you go out last night he asked putting on his concerned uncle hat do i ever go out no well anyway i have a favor to ask i groaned more out of habit than real distress it ll get you out of first period he taunted alright i sighed and start to climb down not today i was still a fucking coward again i walked in to the audio visual room a few minutes late a blond haired woman stood in front of the t v with a notebook and a pen she was the only one in the room are you christian i asked she continued to stare at the t v no i m atheist my parents are catholic i laughed okay and you don t have a french accent either nope sorry but i could give it a shot i walked over and stood beside her looking at the t v damn i thought we had it locked up she shook her head at the giant robot still intact and gloating after demolishing the other one in the ring i examined the screen a little more closely what materials are you using on the outside she didn t get to answer because a girl came skidding in the room flustered and pink in the face are you christian the woman next to me laughed this is still the audio visual room isn t it the frantic girl put her hands in her face and moaned oh god he s probably wandering around the school without a clue where to go you must be claire ramsey the girl who s battery died i said she looked up at me and i found myself staring a little too long at her green eyes the genetic improbability of green eyes was so fascinating plus she was gorgeous and something about her was different honest maybe a virgin she had to be a virgin how did you know my name she asked i was supposed to be your replacement but if you re here then my work is done i started to walk toward the door and she grabbed my arm wait i m not sure i can do this she bit her lower lip nervously do what i asked smiling because it wasn t surgery or anything life or death translate she shook her head what if he uses slang or something not in my third year text book the honest concern that filled her voice was so endearing okay i ll stick around this is bad dan resist the guilty pleasure you re already living with a girl when i looked at claire s face again i knew i couldn t be an ass and leave her hanging but i wouldn t get personal either ever again i committed myself for life to someone else it was marriage in the worst sense posted by rick daley at 9 20 am 8 comments labels sample pages feb 5 2010 query descent into darkness dear agent when aiden s ability to use the dangerous and forbidden art of dark magic manifests during an intense argument with his fiancée his dream to marry and start a family is torn asunder betrayed by the woman he loves and embittered by a long imprisonment he finds himself seeking salvation in the least likely of places the shadow but aiden has to face more challenges than maintaining his sense of humanity under the influence of a magic which urges him to destroy while he fights to free the shadow lord from hell his fiancée joins the forces of the very church he is fighting against and a heated rivalry soon forms between aiden and the ruthless commander of the shadow himself both for the power they both desire and for love descent into darkness is a 129 500 word work of fantasy that retells the classic good vs evil conflict from the perspective of evil it is the first in a series of two books the second of which is currently in progress thank you for your consideration sincerely author posted by rick daley at 9 48 pm 6 comments labels fantasy query the butterfly key revision 4 click here to read the original query click here to read the first revision click here to read the second revision click here to read the third revision dear agent shortly after christian bryson promises to fulfill his wife s dream of starting a family he learns his army reserve unit is deploying for war later when he sustains a wound in battle that renders him incapable of fathering children he wrestles with the thought of letting abigail his wife know blaming his calamity on the so called providence of god and haunted by a promise he can no longer keep christian wishes death would have stolen him instead he must now confront his fears and face his wife dreading the idea of breaking his promise to her christian decides against telling abigail about his injury for fear of turning her dreams of motherhood into a nightmare while abigail tearfully pleads for him to come home christian resolves he can no longer be the husband that she deserves god believes otherwise however and intervenes by sending forth two special travelers one alive the other not to help christian allay the anguish buried deep within his soul with the guidance and love of god s sojourners christian realizes he needs to return home and apologize to abigail upon his homecoming he is ecstatic to find not only his wife but also his unknown progeny awaiting him thus christian relearns a valuable lesson god always has a plan in everything he does the butterfly key is a 72 000 word work of christian fiction a completed manuscript is available upon your request i look forward to working with you regards a d n posted by rick daley at 1 58 pm 10 comments labels christian fiction feb 2 2010 query the butterfly key 3rd revision click here to read the original query click here to read the first revision click here to read the second revision dear agent shortly after christian bryson promises his wife abigail a family he learns he is deploying for war something he views as just a temporary setback in fulfilling his wife s dream of having kids but when wounded in battle he tragically discovers he can no longer father children wishing death s hand would have taken him instead of this second chance at life christian finds himself hopelessly lost drowning in a world of despair blaming his calamity on god and his so called providence and haunted by a promise he can no longer keep christian refuses to tell abigail about his injury even as she tearfully pleads for him to come home with their marriage on the verge of collapse christian determines he can no longer be the man that abigail deserves however god intervenes and sends two special travelers one alive and the other not to return christian home to not only his wife but also his unknown progeny the butterfly key is a 72 000 word work of christian fiction a completed manuscript is available upon your request i look forward to working with you regards a d n posted by rick daley at 6 34 pm 9 comments labels christian fiction sample pages the eleanor story revision 1 click here to read the query click here to read the original sample pages chapter 1 memories can stick like a tongue to a frosty pole in the middle of winter pulling and tugging to break free will only dismember the delicate skin leaving it raw and exposed i remember the exact day the spot light turned on me and by spot light i don t mean me slipping on a pair of tap shoes and performing an excerpt from a broadway musical more like i was standing naked with my classmates staring me down memorizing every detail okay that s a bit dramatic but seriously it was bad sister clarisse calls it adolescence or puberty but i call it exposure the time when every girl s self esteem is mutilated dismembered for me my moment of exposure happened at the beginning of eighth grade what do you think we ll have to do alison whispered to me that morning in homeroom i opened my bag and started pulling out books throwing them on top of the desk i don t know sister clarisse didn t give us any details my nervous tone reflected the buzz of voices drifting through the classroom everyone was feeling it today was different of course when you re my age you can t let anyone but your very best friends know the idea of watching the movie was freakin scary yes that s right ellie cummings was petrified of this official rite of passage into the teenage world but never in a million years would i have guessed how much was 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