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little before i flipped open the phone hi steve dan where are you i got up at five thirty and you were gone did you go out last night he asked putting on his concerned uncle hat do i ever go out no well anyway i have a favor to ask i groaned more out of habit than real distress it ll get you out of first period he taunted alright i sighed and start to climb down not today i was still a fucking coward again i walked in to the audio visual room a few minutes late a blond haired woman stood in front of the t v with a notebook and a pen she was the only one in the room are you christian i asked she continued to stare at the t v no i m atheist my parents are catholic i laughed okay and you don t have a french accent either nope sorry but i could give it a shot i walked over and stood beside her looking at the t v damn i thought we had it locked up she shook her head at the giant robot still intact and gloating after demolishing the other one in the ring i examined the screen a little more closely what materials are you using on the outside she didn t get to answer because a girl came skidding in the room flustered and pink in the face are you christian the woman next to me laughed this is still the audio visual room isn t it the frantic girl put her hands in her face and moaned oh god he s probably wandering around the school without a clue where to go you must be claire ramsey the girl who s battery died i said she looked up at me and i found myself staring a little too long at her green eyes the genetic improbability of green eyes was so fascinating plus she was gorgeous and something about her was different honest maybe a virgin she had to be a virgin how did you know my name she asked i was supposed to be your replacement but if you re here then my work is done i started to walk toward the door and she grabbed my arm wait i m not sure i can do this she bit her lower lip nervously do what i asked smiling because it wasn t surgery or anything life or death translate she shook her head what if he uses slang or something not in my third year text book the honest concern that filled her voice was so endearing okay i ll stick around this is bad dan resist the guilty pleasure you re already living with a girl when i looked at claire s face again i knew i couldn t be an ass and leave her hanging but i wouldn t get personal either ever again i committed myself for life to someone else it was marriage in the worst sense posted by rick daley at 9 20 am 8 comments labels sample pages feb 5 2010 query descent into darkness dear agent when aiden s ability to use the dangerous and forbidden art of dark magic manifests during an intense argument with his fiancée his dream to marry and start a family is torn asunder betrayed by the woman he loves and embittered by a long imprisonment he finds himself seeking salvation in the least likely of places the shadow but aiden has to face more challenges than maintaining his sense of humanity under the influence of a magic which urges him to destroy while he fights to free the shadow lord from hell his fiancée joins the forces of the very church he is fighting against and a heated rivalry soon forms between aiden and the ruthless commander of the shadow himself both for the power they both desire and for love descent into darkness is a 129 500 word work of fantasy that retells the classic good vs evil conflict from the perspective of evil it is the first in a series of two books the second of which is currently in progress thank you for your consideration sincerely author posted by rick daley at 9 48 pm 6 comments labels fantasy query the butterfly key revision 4 click here to read the original query click here to read the first revision click here to read the second revision click here to read the third revision dear agent shortly after christian bryson promises to fulfill his wife s dream of starting a family he learns his army reserve unit is deploying for war later when he sustains a wound in battle that renders him incapable of fathering children he wrestles with the thought of letting abigail his wife know blaming his calamity on the so called providence of god and haunted by a promise he can no longer keep christian wishes death would have stolen him instead he must now confront his fears and face his wife dreading the idea of breaking his promise to her christian decides against telling abigail about his injury for fear of turning her dreams of motherhood into a nightmare while abigail tearfully pleads for him to come home christian resolves he can no longer be the husband that she deserves god believes otherwise however and intervenes by sending forth two special travelers one alive the other not to help christian allay the anguish buried deep within his soul with the guidance and love of god s sojourners christian realizes he needs to return home and apologize to abigail upon his homecoming he is ecstatic to find not only his wife but also his unknown progeny awaiting him thus christian relearns a valuable lesson god always has a plan in everything he does the butterfly key is a 72 000 word work of christian fiction a completed manuscript is available upon your request i look forward to working with you regards a d n posted by rick daley at 1 58 pm 10 comments labels christian fiction feb 2 2010 query the butterfly key 3rd revision click here to read the original query click here to read the first revision click here to read the second revision dear agent shortly after christian bryson promises his wife abigail a family he learns he is deploying for war something he views as just a temporary setback in fulfilling his wife s dream of having kids but when wounded in battle he tragically discovers he can no longer father children wishing death s hand would have taken him instead of this second chance at life christian finds himself hopelessly lost drowning in a world of despair blaming his calamity on god and his so called providence and haunted by a promise he can no longer keep christian refuses to tell abigail about his injury even as she tearfully pleads for him to come home with their marriage on the verge of collapse christian determines he can no longer be the man that abigail deserves however god intervenes and sends two special travelers one alive and the other not to return christian home to not only his wife but also his unknown progeny the butterfly key is a 72 000 word work of christian fiction a completed manuscript is available upon your request i look forward to working with you regards a d n posted by rick daley at 6 34 pm 9 comments labels christian fiction sample pages the eleanor story revision 1 click here to read the query click here to read the original sample pages chapter 1 memories can stick like a tongue to a frosty pole in the middle of winter pulling and tugging to break free will only dismember the delicate skin leaving it raw and exposed i remember the exact day the spot light turned on me and by spot light i don t mean me slipping on a pair of tap shoes and performing an excerpt from a broadway musical more like i was standing naked with my classmates staring me down memorizing every detail okay that s a bit dramatic but seriously it was bad sister clarisse calls it adolescence or puberty but i call it exposure the time when every girl s self esteem is mutilated dismembered for me my moment of exposure happened at the beginning of eighth grade what do you think we ll have to do alison whispered to me that morning in homeroom i opened my bag and started pulling out books throwing them on top of the desk i don t know sister clarisse didn t give us any details my nervous tone reflected the buzz of voices drifting through the classroom everyone was feeling it today was different of course when you re my age you can t let anyone but your very best friends know the idea of watching the movie was freakin scary yes that s right ellie cummings was petrified of this official rite of passage into the teenage world but never in a million years would i have guessed how much was about to change after watching the movie if i had known i probably would have faked an illness this morning and never left my house i hung my bag on the back of my chair and tugged at my green and navy pleated skirt it was identical to the one alison wore but on her the required uniform was a fashion statement alison was already five foot five and growing constantly not in the gangly awkward way but in the i m thirteen but the ninth grade boys all snap their heads in my direction way mostly because this summer she started growing things i didn t have yet don t think i spend all my time obsessing over the bra size of my classmates but it was the first week of school and everyone changed over the summer alison changed the most of all the girls and of course it didn t go unnoticed me well let s just say i have the flattest chest in my entire class this is not opinion based it s a fact even freddie livingston has bigger boobs than me seriously he does i cringe every time freddie is on the skins team when the boys play basketball in the gym i was beginning to realize everything is more complicated in eighth grade for starters we moved to the high school wing with the ninth graders and switched classrooms every hour bumping into them in the hallway and if you re unlucky like me and scored high on your standardized testing you might even end up in a few classes with them talk about feeling like a puny little girl my other best friend hailey leaned in close to me and alison and whispered my sister told me they make everyone put condoms on oranges hailey s sister is in tenth grade this year and entertains herself by giving hailey a load of crap to see if she ll believe it i rolled my eyes you don t put condoms on oranges bananas maybe alison giggled beside me then put her hand over her mouth when sister janet glared in our direction the nun always did this if anyone appeared to be enjoying homeroom hailey s forehead wrinkled and i could tell she was going to give herself a head ache thinking this hard i put my hand on her shoulder to calm her down before whispering as quietly as possible hailey we re not going to put condoms on anything this isn t public school catholics stress abstinence not birth control meaning don t do it so there s no reason to know how to use a condom her face relaxed alison shook her head eyes glued to the folder in her hands ellie s right tj the cutest boy in our grade strolled past us and we immediately jumped apart from our huddled girl talk tj s eyes fell on alison his cheeks blushed a little and he hurried over to his desk did you see that hailey squealed i clapped my hand over her mouth to shut her up alison threw me a grateful look last year we made a pact to never be those girls the squealing ones who pretend they re idiots and refuse to eat in front of boys hailey can t help herself she s naturally ditzy and forgetful it has nothing to do with male presence so we still love her my house after school alison reminded us of our friday tradition it was nothing more than hanging out pigging out making fun of the popular girls the pact to stay squeal free evolved from one of these sessions and occasionally inventing stories about what the nuns really do after school my personal favorite sarah s coming i called her last night hailey said referring to our other best friend in a different homeroom this year alright everyone get your math books out and start with the problems on page ten sister janet said she narrowed her eyes at me pointing one hand toward the door freddie and dara zipped past books tucked under their arms i swallowed hard and threw alison and hailey a desperate look alison bit her lower lip and hailey chewed on her thumb nail they were the most supportive friends a girl could have but they didn t have to leave i did day five of algebra with the ninth graders had officially begun i grabbed my book and hurried after freddie and dara my stomach did flip flops while i made the long walk down the hall but the pukey feeling was completely unrelated to the impending movie and everything to with the older kids i d start worrying about the movie again after algebra being forced into their world even if only for academic reasons would frightened the coolest of eighth graders which i wasn t they didn t want me there anymore than i wanted to be there sister janet says there s always something to be grateful for someone who was worse off whenever i sit in class behind the most popular ninth grade girl april jenson it s difficult to be grateful for anything god has blessed me with but then i look over at jenny ludwig and give thanks that my mother doesn t make me wear the little girl jumpers instead of the skirts seriously she s fourteen with a plaid jumper white button down peter pan collar shirt knee socks and black mary jane s i kid you not after glancing at jenny the first day of school i forced myself to look down at my socially acceptable skirt navy school polo and nike s then i said yes there is a god i may not be april jenson but sister janet is right it could be worse i took in a deep breath before entering the classroom letting my eyes drop to stare at my shoes like i was examining them for dog crap stuck to the bottom it s an unspoken rule not to make eye contact with the ninth graders while on their turf which i was i slid into my seat and noticed mrs halloway wasn t in the room yet frightening i was writing the date on the top of my notebook page when someone tapped me on the shoulder my heart started pounding in my chest it must be a trick i wasn t turning around just to have someone shove my finger up my nose and ask me if i m digging for gold this happened to freddie yesterday i felt terrible for him ellie are you ignoring me a voice whispered in my ear a familiar voice but it couldn t be i turned quickly in my seat and stared right into justin s green eyes what are you doing here i couldn t help asking he smiled it s not an all girl s school i rolled my eyes you wish but i thought you were going to george washington my parents had me on the waiting list all summer a spot opened up at the last minute he frowned and reached his hand toward my shirt and pulled off a cat hair albert einstein s been rolling in your laundry basket again hasn t he i laughed and pushed his hand away i wasn t ignoring you i didn t know you were here plus i m an eighth grader i ll probably get hung or lynched just for this little chat i turned around then because mrs halloway walked in to the room and i realized immediately several pairs of eyes were on me spotlight number one i wished more than anything this was the only one it wasn t my cheeks burned and i slid down in my seat hoping mrs halloway would jump right in to complex equations she did jump into the lesson but not the long boring lecture i hoped for no that would be lucky which i wasn t and that 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